bar scene

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 I take a long drink and am about to set the tankard down on the table as the door crashed inward crushing into the back was. The shock wave of the sound slamming into the ears of everyone in the room and shaking the beams above me. As two soldiers walking in with stretched eyes, dark with rings covering their under lids of their eyes, sags showing ones age and the dirt, representing the long ride from the capital, covers their faces like the paint women wear to make their skin smooth. The stench of the rich alcohol becomes again apparent as the open door lets the fresh icy teeth of the cold rush in and bite me like a ravenous wolf. The men split and walked towards me one on the left of the table one on the right, and as they approached I attempted to stand and give the proper greeting but am stopped by the elder soldier with a wave of his hand.

“What can I do for you gentlemen?” I said keeping as calm as best I could with a smile on my face. They were here to take me back to the capital. That was not going to happen.

“You don't need to know just come with us or there will be trouble.” the elder said standing beside the table holding his crossbow at his waist in a non offensive way. While the younger soldier approached pointing his crossbow from the waist at me more in a defensive way for security sake then an actual threatening way. Silence engulfed the small room, just like the cold from outside had a moment before.

“Well did you hear him or are you just deaf, answer!” the younger said in a half yell and before the other soldier could stop him, he hit me with the butt of his crossbow trying to get me to answer. I took the blow, pain flowing freely from my shoulder into my brain, but it was only a bruise, the soldier was weak. Before the young inexperienced soldier could get back to defend himself I acted, raising my arm as if in pain but bring down my clenched fist on the chairs fount right leg breaking it in half. This threw the chair off balance, and using that momentum threw the chair into the younger soldier curling under it as it flew over me. In a flash I pushed against the floor using the force to kick one of the legs of the table forcing it to spin into the elder soldier crippling him allowing gravity to pull him to the ground, swiftly grabbing the broken leg using the now spiked weapon on one side into the soldier under the chair letting the crimson fluid flow out of his eye socket. Then pulling it out turned and threw it at the elder, who was trying to get up at this time, knocking him out. Standing, I turned to the bar behind me setting the dead soldier's bag of gold on the counter, holding more then enough to pay for the chair and the mess, then turned and walked out into the cold air closing the heavy door behind me.

Magic

Magic, there are our main types of wizards that study magic. These four are the classic, fire, water, earth, and wind. wizards can choose one type with the option of a sub element (Ex. major fire, minor earth) or they can just focus on one main type of element (so its like collage where you have a major and you can have a minor but it takes time out of your studies of the major element thus making you not as strong as a wizard without a minor) but these minor or sub groups of elements have less power or strength but they allow one to have many more abilities thus being able to counter or surprise enemies with these abilities. Now if a wizard becomes a master of their element (ex. master fire wizard) then they can turn themselves into something like a "minor" demon type of thing, basically they can turn into a demon with less power but all the abilities (in time just like anything else it takes practice) a wizard can become about half as strong as a real demon can be, which is still very powerful.Now each demon has a form that they take with each demon having a special identification sort of thing, for example one fire demon which raged through the world about 125 years before the story takes place has a deep scar that constantly looks like its bleeding, but its not actually bleeding its just a scar that the flames hit and flare out, this demon left half of the land in the north burned and scared for 50 years and that part could not be used for farming for 90 years. These types that the different demons can be: fire demons,  water serpent, earth golum, and wind sprite. Each element isn't just that element, for example ground can also control medal, wood, etc.(most earth wizards have past times of being a blacksmith) another example is wind it controls rain, lightning, fog, etc. Wizards can do much more then just their abilities or powers but they can combine their powers into one, making it stronger and much more effective ageist  others. An few examples of this are fire and ground can make lava, or a flaming meteors, another one is a whirlpool which is wind and water.Now onto the fire breather who is nether wizard nor demon but something more powerful yet understanding. The fire breather is infused with "magic fire" or the tattoos he has, and depending on the size and detail (as long as he does not become a fire demon) then he can become just as powerful with a some training and hard work as a master fire wizard and with time experience and more training he can become as if not more powerful then a fire demon.

The Fire Breather

 The fire breather is a man who is mentally extremely strong and physically very fit. why this is, is because to become a fire breather the person has to have a tattoo of a dragon burned into your skin by magic. The size of the dragon and the detail of it will not only determine the strength and abilities (such as top "cast" fire and such) of the fire breather but also his physical abilities (such as flexibility reflexes etc. (though these can increase with disciplined or decrease with neglect just as any other human)) Now for the catch... to have this operation done the person becoming the fire breather has to be near death thus making it not only difficult to get a person onto such a state  also to keep the person from dying during the operation. this complicates things just a little compared to whats coming. continuing on that if the magic casters creating the tattoo makes it too detailed or to big then instead of becoming a fire breather, they will instead turn into a fire demon. which then wreaks havoc on the land, yea classic i know. now moving on so anyway torturing a person into a near death state will make them go crazy thus making them turn into fire demons, so yea the ways to do this is narrowing very fast. so the person needs to be mentally strong because they have to not only go through the near death experience but also the immense pain from having a tattoo permanently burned into your skin. (ouch) then after the operation the person has to be not only nursed back to heath but taken care of so that he does not go mad, or demon, from the experience. then finally the person has to learn to cope with himself and what he is.